在seek上的简历,请前辈斧正

dlcat.

新兵一个,刚来报道,来这里先就是和各位求助,非常不好意思啊,我爱好踢球和钓鱼,看到这里这么丰富的活动,异常兴奋啊,离开踢球无法活,还以为澳洲足球不普及,钓鱼就更不用说了,还有鲨鱼,我倒,在大连这边1斤以上的海鱼都快绝迹了,全钓2两的,以后如果有机会和大家切磋.
至于我的简历,主要是0浏览,难道雇主不上seek?申请PR的时候在政府备档案,倒是有个达尔文的工作邀请,太荒凉了.
这是在seek上写的,一直没人浏览我的简历,奇怪,请大家看看有什么问题,尤其是求职习惯上的问题.
Key:   No. of times your resume appeared in resume search results
  No. of advertisers who viewed your full resume
  No. of advertisers who forwarded you an invitation to apply  
Career Objectives
Summary: I'm an experienced network & system administrator with 6 years experiences,especially at unix OS & database,looking for a permanent network or database job,the working field such as university,goverment,or bank.I have PR VISA.

Education/Qualifications
Institution: *******
City/Country: Beijing/PR.China
Qualifications: Computer science & application
Completed: 2000
Employment History
University of *********    Start Date: Nov 2001
End Date: Currently Employed
Position/Title: director of Net Center/senior engineer
Responsibilities/
Achievements:
Building up the computer network for  University of ************(10000+ students)
.The network scale: more than 3000 network nodes, about 30 servers, more than 1000 computers, about 80 switches. I am in charge of the connection management within this range of addresses, network supervision and control, network administration, server maintenance, database platform building and administration, and so forth.

Neusoft Group Start Date: Jul 2000
End Date: Jul 2001
Position/Title: Programmer of the Telecommunication Depa
Responsibilities/
Achievements:
China United Telecommunication Corporation 1001 Call Center program: the platform is Solaris +Oracle+Java.  
Skill Summary
Non Technical Skills: With 6 years experiences of network leader of 10000+ students college,I under strong press , meet and solve different problems of network & system.  
Computer Skills: Oracle 8; Intermediate
SQL Server; Intermediate
C Language; Intermediate
HTML; Intermediate
JavaScript; Intermediate
Perl; Intermediate
SQL; Advanced
IIS; Intermediate
Routers; Advanced
UNIX; Advanced
Windows NT; Intermediate

Languages
Mandarin, English
第一次用英语写简历,直觉是有问题,具体不清楚什么问题.请大家百忙中look一下,

coogee.

这里简历写法和国内不同，必须突出重点，找unix工作就写unix牛牛牛的，找oracle工作就写
oracle强啊强得，无关的东西尽量不要多写。另外感觉楼主的写作功力有点不足。
[ 本帖最后由 coogee 于 2007-2-24 20:03 编辑 ]

dlcat.

谢谢楼上,英语很不行,肯定要加强了.

月亮.

介绍以前工作的内容太少了，显得内容空洞。
而且Achievements写的不像Achievements，比如这个：
China United Telecommunication Corporation 1001 Call Center program: the platform is Solaris +Oracle+Java.  
要具体展开你作出了什么成绩，达到了什么效果

dlcat.

谢谢楼上,我比较懒,找工作,就凭嘴,看来锻炼英语是王道.
有IT的老大们能介绍一下澳洲的应用环境么,我不想做软件开发.
比如网络设备品牌占有率? server的平台?应用平台?数据库平台?

荠菜.

建议如果有时间还是去上一下AMES的课程，还是有帮助的。

lanlan0713.

skillmax的课程也不错

zhengtao.

原帖由 dlcat 于 2007-2-24 20:25 发表
谢谢楼上,我比较懒,找工作,就凭嘴,看来锻炼英语是王道.
有IT的老大们能介绍一下澳洲的应用环境么,我不想做软件开发.
比如网络设备品牌占有率? server的平台?应用平台?数据库平台?
能侃就一定能够找到工作。不过如果能在简历上补补，给中介留下个强烈的印象，成功率会高不少。

cooooool

不错不错！